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In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city center, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own idea.

In
certian
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certain
 major urban areas,
humens
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humans
 need to pay a fee when they drive
thier
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their
 vehicle into the downtown,in a policy to lower the number of cars in the area.In my opinion,lowering the
fee's
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fees
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 can
effect
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affect
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 the
city
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life
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 both positively and negatively. On the one hand,putting a charge on
vehicle's
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vehicles
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 can decrease the number of
car's
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cars
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 in the
city
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which
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, which
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 can lead to lower CO2 emissions
,
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apply
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and traffic
noises
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noise
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.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 action will improve the
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life style
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lifestyle
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 of people and will increase both their health
,
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and the
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city
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city's
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 financial income.To
illustrast
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illustrate
,
this
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 will lead them to find other transportation systems
such
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 as metro,bicycles,walking,and
electrical
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electric
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 buses.
In
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 a result,citizens will develop
thier
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their
 strength and stamina by riding and moving,
also
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 they will increase
the
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their
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economical
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economic
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 earnings from other
mobility's
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mobility
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.
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on
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 the other hand,logistics and trading in and out
the
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of the
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city
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 will be
effected
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affected
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from
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by
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this
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 approach.Multiple
company's
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companies
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 will suffer a huge loss
and
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, and
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 that will directly result in rising
the
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apply
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prices of
fright
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freight
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which
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, which
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 will result in inflation.To illustrate,people might enjoy the peace
but
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, but
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 they will face a severe issue regarding their daily
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life
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lives
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.
in
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In
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 conclusion,putting a fee will
be
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have
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 a
seginficant postive
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significant positive
 and negative impact that will change the
economical
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economic
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life
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 of
humens
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humans
 in the
city
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.

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language
Fix spelling and common errors such as certian, humans, thier, downtown. Use a spell checker and proofread.
structure
Make each paragraph have one clear idea. Start with a topic sentence and end with a link to the next idea.
cohesion
Use simple and clear links like and, but, so, also to join ideas. Keep sentences short.
content
Give at least one real example to support each main point. This makes the case stronger.
task response
State your view clearly in the introduction or conclusion and balance opposing views.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides and to give a view.
structure
There is some use of contrast words like on the one hand and on the other hand.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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