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Band 2.5

Very few people who commit crime want to. They do it because they feel they have no choice. This is the reality of the situation, and it means that police and prisons are not relevant to reducing crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a lot of
people
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commit crime
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crime
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crimes
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 do not have a choice but to continue committing crimes. I believe that police and
prisons
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 are relevant to reducing
crime
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,
becouse
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because
government
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the government
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alwayse carres
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always cares
 about the level of
crime
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. First of all, police mans became stronger in countries with a high quality of life.
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, every little robber will be found.
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, without freedom
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 the bad influence of other cityzens, the level of
crime
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 will lose its popularity.
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, every situation of arrest, even if it was just bad language, has an effect on
people
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 who think about
crime
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.
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, it is believed that
prisons
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 make
people
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's lives unbearable for something in future. Because criminals often look like someone who can not be part of happy and successful in society.
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, even if it was
virtual
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a virtual
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crime
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 like hackers, any other areas which are not related to computers would not like to work with.
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,
people
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 trust in to impact of
prisons
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, and choose to be honest with themself to be free.
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,
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 someone
made
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commits
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 a
crime
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 in
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apply
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of difficult situation, I suppose that administrations with strict rules and
prisons
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 keep streets clear.

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task
Say your real view at the start and keep it through the essay.
structure
Make 2 or 3 clear points in the body and give a short example for each.
coherence
Use simple links to show flow, like first, then, but, so.
accuracy
Check spelling and fix big grammar mistakes.
style
Keep sentences short and use common words.
structure
The essay has an easy start and end.
ideas
A view on crime and punishment is there.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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