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Band 4.5

Write a letter to the car rental company. In your letter: •Explain when and where you rented the car •Describe what happened and the problems you faced •Say what action you would like the company to take

I am writing
this
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 letter with disappointment with the
car
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 I rented from your workshop on January 15, 2026 afternoon, for
price
Correct article usage
a price
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 $20 per hour for about 6 hours. It was Civic 800 red in colour. It was smooth
in
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at
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 the start, but after 15 minutes of the drive engine of the
car
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 started making a loud
noice
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noise
,
Punctuation problem
.
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 I stopped the
car
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 for a
while
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, but it did not help at all. Later, the air conditioner system of the
car
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 stops working, and you know how hard it is to drive without
A.C
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A/C
 in
such
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a
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apply
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hot weather.
Moreover
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, when I have given the full rental price of the
car
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 in advance. I would like to get a 70% refund on the price I
pay
Wrong verb form
paid
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 for
this
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car
Punctuation problem
car,
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 as I took off from my job to enjoy a peaceful holiday with my wife, but
this
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car
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 gave us so much trouble today. I would advise you to get it repaired
as
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, as
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 your shop is at the prime location of Lakeshore
and
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, and
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 it is a tourist place, and I don't want anyone else to experience the same trouble I face today. You can reply back, and I will provide you bank details. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely, Jane.

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task response
You answered all parts: when/where you rented, what happened, and what you want. But add a clear ask like 'please refund 70% or fix the car' and say how you want to be paid back.
coherence
How to be clear: Put facts in order. Use short lines. Use full stops. It helps the reader to see the time, place, fault, and request in turn.
coherence
Greeting and closing: Add 'Dear Sir/Madam' at the start and 'Yours sincerely, Jane' at the end.
coherence
Single idea per paragraph: Make one idea in each paragraph. One for rental details, one for each fault, one for the ask.
content
The date and place of rent are stated.
content
The letter states the ask for money back.
structure
You tell the problem in order.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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