The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph gives information about the amount of money that
spend
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is spent
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on
the
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apply
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Pizza
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,
Fish
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and Chips and Hamburgers in Australia by
youth
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young
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people. Units are measured in time.
Overall
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, the expenditure
of
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on
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Hamburgers was the highest,
while
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all teenagers
spend
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spent
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less
amount
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apply
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on
Pizza
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.
However
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,
Fish
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and Chips were peak at the beginning after
experience
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experiencing
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a significant decrease
in
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at
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the end of the period. In 1975, the
spend
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spending
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of
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on
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Fish
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and Chips
were
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was
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at
the
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its
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highest point at 100
and
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, and
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it fell slowly
about
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to about
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82 in 1980,
whereas
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the buyers spend 10 in 1975 , and it rose dramatically
roughly
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to about
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60 in the same least,
while
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the
consumers
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spending
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on
pizza
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was the lowest
spend
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apply
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in 1975 about 2
and
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, and
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it reached 18 in
the
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1980. Both in 1995 and 2000, the
hamburgers
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hamburger
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lovers
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lovers'
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spend
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spending
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was 100 and
level
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levelled
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off
until
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at
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the
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least,
also
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on
pizza
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customed stayed
same
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the same
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for 5
years
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years,
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reached to
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reaching
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82, but on
fish
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dropped to 45 in 1995 and it reached
to
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apply
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38
in
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by
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the end of the pattern.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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