Some students prefer to live with their parents while pursuing university education. However, others stay away from their parents. What are advantages and disadvantages of living in either way?

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some
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choose to live with their
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studying at university,
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others prefer to live away from their families. Both choices have
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own advantages and disadvantages. From my point of view
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would prefer to live
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because comfortable and safe On the one
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has several benefits.
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students
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can save money because they do not need to pay for rent and food .
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they can receive emotional and financial support from their family .
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can help them focus
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more on their studies and feel more secure
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,it is more comfortable and safer for studying
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away from
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has its advantages. More independence, learn responsibility, on top of that develop life skills, build
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more independent
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can study in their own room without distractions, younger individuals go to
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know
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money
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know solve problems independently In conclusion, living with
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and living independently both have benefits and drawbacks. The decision depends on individual circumstances.
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students
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should choose
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their personal and financial conditions
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Whereas
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living alone helps
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. become more independent and responsible

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro, then two clear paragraphs, then a short ending.
coherence
Use simple links to connect ideas: firstly, secondly, on the one hand, on the other hand, and but.
content
Give one side but also show the other side with a point or example to help the reader.
grammar
Check grammar a bit: proper 'a', 'the', plural, and how verbs fit.
content
It shows both sides of the choice.
coherence
There is a part where you use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to link ideas.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional support
  • Financial implications
  • Self-reliance
  • Personal growth
  • Social networking
  • Professional contacts
  • Household chores
  • Independence
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Burden
  • Engage
  • Proximity
  • Conducive
  • Insulated
  • Opportunities
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