The internet and technology, like mobile phones and laptops, are connecting us to each other every hour of the day via networking sites and applications. Do you think it’s an advantage or disadvantage? Explain your answer. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

It is widely accepted that worldwide
web
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Wide Web
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and gadgets help us to communicate with each
others
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other
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on
daily
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a daily
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basis. The main benefits of
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is
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the possibility to communicate with anybody anywhere and anytime,
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the drawbacks are in lack of privacy and involvement in real life. Personally,
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consider
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an advantage of our technological era.

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task response
Your essay states that technology helps people talk, but you give few ideas. To raise the score, add more points about both sides and end with a clear view.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas go together. Simple links like also, but, however, and so help your writing flow.
grammar and accuracy
Fix small grammar mistakes: World Wide Web or World Wide Web; 'each other'; 'daily basis'; capitalize I; agree noun with verb (the main benefit is not are).
strength
You show a clear idea that tech helps talk.
strength
Your view is easy to follow and you use simple words.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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