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The chart gives information on the main purposes why students select a particular universities in the UK, in 1997 and 2007.

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, when suitable degree courses were dominant, good sports and social activities were the lowest. The quality of the resources chosen by students was about 21 %, but it was followed by a considerable drop to 17 % in 2007. The suitable degree courses were about 35 %, and they increased slightly to 37 % over a decade. The
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 home was about 10 %, and it was followed by a dramatic growth to 22 % in 2007. The quality of teaching selected by learners was about 15 %, and it increased slightly to 18 % in 2007.
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, when it comes to the good sports and social activities, they were followed by a considerable drop to 6 % in 2007.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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