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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of British students at the particular university who were able to speak additional languages in two years (2000 and 2010).

The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of British
students
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 at the particular university who were able to speak additional languages in two years (2000 and 2010).
Overall
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,
while
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 Spanish remained the most popular single
language
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, the percentage of
students
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 who spoke no other
language
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 saw a significant decrease. German was the only
language
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 whose percentages had not have never changed. Regarding the increases, it is clear from
charts
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the charts
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 that
Spanish
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the Spanish
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, “Another
language
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” and “two other
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language
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languages
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” categories all grew by 5%. Spanish rose from 30% to 35%,
students
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 who
kneow
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knew
 another
language
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 climbed from 15% to 20% and
students
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 who could speak
know
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and know
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 two other languages rose from 10% to 15% in 2010.
In contrast
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, the proportion of
students
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 who spoke no other
language
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 halved, dropping from 20% to 10%. French
also
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 saw a decrease, falling from 15% to 10%. Meanwhile, the percentage of German speakers remained completely stable at 10% throughout the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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