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The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

The diagram
illusturate
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illustrates
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the procducting
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procducting
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production
 of
ethanol
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.
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,
to prepare
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preparing
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ethanol
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 consists of more than seven steps. The including three main stages.
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Firstly
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 grow up trees, second is processing
and
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, and
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at the end
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 we get
ethanol
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. As for
, we
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us, we
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 see
this
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 process is endless.
Is
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 the first
we
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step we
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 started with the energy , which is gained
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from sunlight
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 and
corbon
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carbon
 dioxide,
then
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 plants grow
up
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apply
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. For the second stage , we use the tractor for
harvesting
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the harvesting
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 process. As the next pre-process the product. The product
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to
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into
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 cellulose and
sent
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is sent
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 to the process of processing
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stage.
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 After
that
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 they added some sugars and microbes. The
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process encompass
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encompass
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encompasses
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 the
last
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of
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step of
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 processing, we get the
ethanol
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.
At the
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end
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ethanol
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 was created. The
ethanol
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allocate
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which
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, which
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 is
,
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apply
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use
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 the cars or planes. When they use
after
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apply
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ehtanol
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ethanol
, they will create carbon dioxide.
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a
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 result
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 carbon dioxide
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 the first main case.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomass
  • ethanol
  • fermentation
  • microorganisms
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • distillation
  • purification
  • dehydration
  • raw materials
  • storage
  • distribution
  • renewable energy
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable fuel
  • concentration
  • impurities
  • alcohol content
  • crop growth
  • conversion process
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