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Today more and more tourists are visiting place where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

It is argued between people advising
eachother
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each other
 about their next travel location, some individuals prefer urban areas, and the rest would love to see
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god's nature, which in my
opinion
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 believe we should give every
place
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 a
chance
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 and judge it by your own experience.
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, in my perspective i would say one of the main benefits from visiting a rarely spots, it's going to be the whole experience, the pictures, and the whole idea of giving the
place
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 a
chance
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 despite the uncouraging reviews from people who visited the
place
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 before, giving a
place
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 a
chance
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 even on the bad circumstances is privilege, having the
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 to give your on opinion on a new experience, and having a new memories in a different difficult
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 is something you would thank youself for it in your future self.
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, we have a different statement
of
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 people
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 not happy with their choice of
travling
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travelling
 to unpopular places, starting with them not
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into
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the
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 and
end
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 up not admiring the
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, thinking
it's
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 could be
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familiar
 with urban experiences
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. Therefore
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therefore
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, some individuals
experinced
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experienced
 the hotness or the
ccoldness
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coldness
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 the
sahra
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Sahara
,
Anartic
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Arctic
,
beacuse
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because
 the different air is not
somthing
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something
 you can be flexible with.
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,
i
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 would support the statement by saying it depends on the
traveler
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traveller's
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 mindset,
and
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their expectations and how they correctly prepare for it.

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structure
Plan your answer. Start with a short intro that restates the prompt. Then two clear parts: one on good parts and one on bad parts. End with a clear view.
grammar
Use one idea per sentence. Keep sentences short. Use simple words. Check for errors in spelling and cap I.
content
Give real and clear examples. If you say heat and cold in desert and cold, say how this affects travel.
ideas
The essay tries to cover both sides and ends with a view.
cohesion
Some link words are used to show order.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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