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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Many people argue that
history
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 is an integral part of our school
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 others believe that
students
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 should be taught
science
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 and
technology
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both views in detail before presenting my own view.
Firstly
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,
history
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 is an important school subject for
students
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.
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 is because
history
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 teaches us about many important past events that took place in our country. The sacrifices of many heroes who fought for the state to
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 its independence. These stories from our past teach
students
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 the value of freedom and develop a sense of patriotism and responsibility.
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,
history
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 tells us the stories of important personalities like Quaid-e-Azam
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 never gave up for their cause.
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 gives
students
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 motivation and encouragement to achieve their life goals.
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, stories like The Titanic teach us to never be arrogant about our achievements.
On the other hand
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, subjects like
science
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 and
technology
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 are an essential part of classroom lessons. In today’s digital world, our lives mostly revolve around
technology
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. Learning about
science
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 can help
students
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 make the best use of new technological advancements like artificial intelligence. They can use
technology
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 to gain knowledge and do better in their future careers.
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,
students
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 can be taught different valuable skills,
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 as web
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 schools
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 can help them earn money through freelancing.
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,
students
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 can use AI to learn about a particular lesson or to practice for their exams. In my opinion,
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students
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 learn valuable lessons from
history
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, learning about
science
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 and
technology
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 is more fruitful
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 in today’s digital era.

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planning
Plan the essay before you write. Make a short plan with three ideas for the body and a clear end.
structure
Write a clear intro that shows the two views and your own view. End with a short clean conclusion.
content
Give a main idea for history and another for science. Build each idea with some proof or reason.
examples
Use clear examples that fit your point, and explain how they show your view.
linking
Use linking words to show flow, like also, but, however, and so.
grammar
Check your grammar. Make full sentences and avoid small parts that do not fit.
task
The essay talks about both sides and gives your view.
cohesion
There are some good links, like 'On the other hand'.
content
The idea that science and AI can help work and study is clear and good.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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