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The bar chart illustrates numbers of citizens who visiting 3 various categories of museums namely National Gallery, Victoria and Albert Museums and British Museum, during the 2007-2012 years.

The bar chart illustrates
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of citizens who
visiting
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visited
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 3 various categories of museums
namely
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, namely
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National
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the National
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Gallery
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,
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Victoria
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the Victoria
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 and
Albert
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 Museums and
British
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the British
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Museum
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, during the
2007
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years 2007
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-2012
years
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apply
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. The
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 was the most
popular
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popular,
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represented
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representing
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 roughly 13
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people, compared with
National
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the National
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Gallery
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which
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, which
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 was the least popular in 2007.
However
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, in 2008
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 was approximately the same
us
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as
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 in 2007,
while
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National
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the National
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Gallery
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 climbed gradually. By
2009
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2009,
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 these two categories were nearly equal.
However
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, in 2010 National
Gallery
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 experienced growth, meanwhile
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Victoria
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the Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 ranked
last
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 with around 7 million
of
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apply
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viewers. In 2011 British
Museum
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 was the lion’s share compared with
National
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the National
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 Park
which
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, which
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 was slightly lower
close
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, close
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 to 11
millions
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million
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of residents
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visitors
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. Albeit in
2012
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2012,
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 these two attractions
located
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were located
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conversely
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.
Overall
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, the National
Gallery
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 showed an upward trend, but all three museums remained popular.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, victoria, albert, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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