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Band 2.5

Million of dollars are spent on space every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

Each year handful of money is invested
on
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in
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 astronauts. It is often argued that
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thus
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this
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 amount must be used for enhancing lifestyles. I strongly agree with the statement because
human'
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humans'
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 first priority and Earth's environment
is
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are
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 crucial for survival. It is the fundamental duty of the nation to address the people's issues first. Nowadays, the issue of unemployment and high living costs is rapidly rising. People's living standards
is
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are
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 declining very dramatically. Newly graduated
struggle
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students struggle
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 to find jobs. They don't have enough to fulfil their daily needs.
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, a study shows, more than 60% post post-graduates are unemployed. The government should create job opportunities for them , like internship programs. Environmental conditions deteriorate every day. Global warming is a very fast-growing issue. Different types of pollution are increasing every day. Earth is becoming infeasible for natural creatures. It is very crucial to invest in projects to use bio-friendly products.
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, investment in electric cars. The consumption of fuel will
reduce
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 and
thus
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 result in less carbon dioxide. Which ultimately helps to control global warming. In conclusion, nations should spend more money on better living standards
instead
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 of space projects. In order to improve the quality of life and
planet
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the planet
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, is completely agree with the statement.

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task response
State your view in the first line and keep it the same through the essay.
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Give 2 or 3 clear ideas and add a small example for each.
coherence cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, next, also, but, finally to show the flow.
grammar
Fix big grammar and word errors. Use easy, now words.
structure
End with a short, clear conclusion that restates your view.
examples
Be careful with facts or data; aim for simple, true facts or avoid hard numbers.
task response
Your view on the topic is clear.
coherence
You give two main ideas: jobs and the Earth.
lexical resource
You try to give example to support your point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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