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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
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comparing
Punctuation problem
, comparing
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 visitors staying on cruise ships with
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the number of total visitors steadily increased throughout the period,
while
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 the two
trend
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trends
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 showed a slight change. In 2010, tourists staying on
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island
Correct article usage
the island
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 higher than
that
Correct determiner usage
those
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of
Change preposition
apply
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staying on cruise ships, and
a
Correct article usage
the
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 biggest gap among the graphs appeared in 2012.
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However
Punctuation problem
However,
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 the two
graph
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graphs
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 intersected between 2015 and 2016, and tourists
prefered
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preferred
 to stay on cruise ships
than
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rather than
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Use synonyms
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on island
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island
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islands
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 in 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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