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Some people believe that advertising is useful and informative while others believe it provides false information in order to increase the price of products and services. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is always a topic of debate
that
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whether
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 marketing is worth
and
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it and
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 informative,
whereas
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 some think it gives wrong
information
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 to increase their sales and
amounts
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profits
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.
This
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 essay discusses both sides. Marketing is a very effective way to promote products and services. If
companies
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 do not use
this
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saling startegy
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selling strategy
, many people will not know about different choices.
Moreover
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, buyers can easily make decisions because they already
got
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have
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 enough
information
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.
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: car
companies
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 advertise their new launch
and
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, and
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 during that time they provide data
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 as price, fuel efficiency and
other
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others
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.
Therefore
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, knowing
before hand
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it
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, it
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 is easy for
coustmers
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customers
 to make decisions.
On the other hand
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,
companies
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uses
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use
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 marketing tricks. They do not give all
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information
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the information
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 about their products. In order to get
large
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a large
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profit
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profit,
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 they only advertise
good
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the good
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 sides of their products. They usually never mention the drawbacks.
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, car
companies
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 never expose to
costumers
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customers
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 their
after saling
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after-sales
vaule
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value
 or maintenance cost. In conclusion,
I
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it
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 is often
aruged
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argued
 that advertisements are important as they
gives
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give
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 product details,
while
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other
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the other
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 side thinks the spread
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alters
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information
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. In my opinion, Marketing is important to attract buyers.

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language
Fix many spelling and grammar mistakes to make meaning clear.
structure
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and restate it in the end.
structure
Build each point with a clear topic sentence and link it to the view.
content
Use more examples and connect them to your point for a stronger argument.
language
Use simple, easy words and short sentences to show good control of the language.
content
Clear attempt to discuss both sides, not just one view.
example
Uses a car example to show a point.
structure
Has an intro and a conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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