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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by a very small number of people. People say that govt should spend public money on saving these languages. Discuss both views and give ur opinion.

Nowadays, several
languages
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 are in danger of extinction,
due to
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 the fact that they are spoken by very few people. Someone's
tought
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thought
 is that
Government
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the Government
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shoud
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should
 economically support these
languages
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. Oppositely, other
ones
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people
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 believe that
this
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 isn't a fundamental issue. In my opinion, each
language
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 should be supported and
mantained
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maintained
 through the years. English is one of the most spoken
languages
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 in the world, like Spanish, Japanese, Chinese and Italian. In each
Country
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 there is a main
language
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, but there are many local
dialects
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 that are typical of each place. For
istance
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instance
, in Italy there were different vulgar
dialects
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, varying from
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one
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 region to another
one
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apply
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or from
a
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one
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 city to the
near
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nearby
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 ones. Old people knew these terms very well
but
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, but
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,
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apply
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 with the passing of
the
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apply
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time, a progressive decreasing number of the new generation
knows
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know
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 these nouns.
Therefore
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, these
dialects
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 are in danger of
exrtinction
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extinction
.
Governmment
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Government
 should save these
languages
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, in order to protect these pieces of history that are somehow typical of each place. In my opinion, our
language
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 is our history. My grandparents used to speak dialect
and
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, and
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 they tried to teach
me and my brother
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my brother and me
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.
On the other hand
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, when we went to school, we weren't allowed to speak
this
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language
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, but we had to speak current Italian. I strongly agree with the
tought
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thought
 that
Government
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the Government
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 should spend public money
,
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apply
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 in order to teach these
languages
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 at school. It can be concluded that, in everyday life, some local terms and
languages
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 can be obsolete and somehow lost.
Government
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The government
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 should support these
dialects
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, preserving real pieces of history.

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Task response
State your main idea clearly in the first paragraph and keep it in all body parts.
Task response
Discuss both sides well and give clear reasons for your view.
Coherence and cohesion
Use a new paragraph for each idea. Add simple linking words to join ideas.
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Add more examples to back your points. One example is not enough.
Coherence and cohesion
Fix spelling and small grammar errors to help reading.
Task response
The idea that language is part of history is clear.
Coherence and cohesion
You use a personal tale to show how language is taught in family.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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