Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter • describe what you like about the library • say what you don’t like • make suggestions for improvements

Dear Sir, Mam I am writing

this

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letter in regards to give you feedback about the improvements which can be made in order to provide more facilities to the users.

Firstly

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, I would like to appreciate your approach. I

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have been

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coming to your

library

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from

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for

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last

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the last

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3 years

now

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apply

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, because it's a very clean and peaceful environment to study.

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, all your staff members are very helpful in nature. I

also

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like the

organisation

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organisational

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skills of your team, as it's very easy to find a particular book in your

library

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, and I rarely ask anyone for help because of the easy approach to everything.

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, one important thing

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apply

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which

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apply

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you can work

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on is

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to make a

seperate

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separate

play zone for children. I noticed a lot of parent bring their kids

along with

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them in the

library

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, which sometimes causes disturbance. Apart from that, you can

also

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arrange a small

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and separate coffee station, which people can enjoy

while

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working.

Furthermore

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, if it will allow you

budget

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to budget

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, you can

also

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make a small private meeting zone, which people can use with advance booking. It would be beneficial for most

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apply

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the

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apply

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working individuals to attend their online meeting without disturbing anyone. I am excited to see positive changes in the

library

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as it's my favourite place to visit. Your faithfuly, Yasmein

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Mar 4, 2026

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language/greeting

Fix the greeting and close. Use 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully' and check spellings.

structure

Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with what you like, then what you don’t like, then your ideas for change.

language

Use simple, short sentences. Avoid long run‑on sentences. Use easy words.

task response

Give a short reason for each idea. Say how it will help users or the library.

accuracy/style

Make some phrases more proper: 'children's play area' instead of 'separate play zone', and 'coffee area' instead of 'coffee station' if you can.

tone

Polite tone.

content

Clear idea of what you like and what to change.

coherence

Lays out ideas in order with linking words.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

221 words

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