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Some say that today's life is‏ better than it will be in the future; othehrs disagree and say that in the future life will be better tha now. Discuss and include your own opinion.

There is no denying that
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 modern technology has transformed the way
people
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 live.
while
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 some argue that
life
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 in the
future
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 will be more convenient than now.
However
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, both views have
own
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their own
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 pros and cons. I will discuss both views and give my own
perspectives
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about
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on
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this
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 topic. To commence with, technological progress has significantly improved living standards. In the
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future
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future,
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 medical facilities
are
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will be
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 more convenient and every health disease
that are
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will be
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 easily treatable
in
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everywhere in
future
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 because of
advancement
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the advancement
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 of technology.
Moreover
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,
devlopment
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development
 in
educational
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the educational
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 system and
improve
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improvement in
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 sanitation have increased
life
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 expectancy
arround
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around
 the world.
Furthermore
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,
devlopment
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development
 in transportation and communication
have
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has
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 made daily
life
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 more convenient.
For instance
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,
people
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 can travel Long distances within hours and stay connected with their loved ones instantly through smartphones and
internet
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the internet
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. These improvements have made
life
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 safer
faster
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, faster
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and
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, and
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 more efficient in
future
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.
On the other
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hand
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It
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it
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 is
a
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apply
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true that
life
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 is better now.
People
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 are more closely connected to their family and community
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, and
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they
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apply
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of
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in
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 the leave in joint families we are
strong
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, strong
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relationship
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relationships
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 are
develop
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developed
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. In
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future
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the future
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individuals
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, individuals
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live
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will live
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 in urban
area
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areas
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instead
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 of, live joint families.
For
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example
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example,
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 in many traditional society 3
generation
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generations
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 live under one roof
sharing
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, sharing
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 responsibility and
sporting
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supporting
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 each other emotionally and financially
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Moreover
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. Moreover
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, the environment was less polluted now
as
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, as
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 there are
fever
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fewer
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because
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apply
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an
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apply
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industries
as a
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result
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result,
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people
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 enjoy clean air and
more
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a more
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 peaceful lifestyle
now
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apply
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. Inclusion all though
in
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, in
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future
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the future
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offer
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offers
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stronger
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a stronger
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 social Bond and
faster
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a faster
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life
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.
I
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My
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 family believe that
life
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2
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is 2
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days better than in
future
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.

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structure
Start each paragraph with a clear idea in one simple sentence.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling, and use capital letters at the start of sentences.
lexical
Use small, common words and short sentences so the point is easy to get.
conclusion
Finish with a clear view that states your own choice.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like also, but, however to keep flow.
content
You try to discuss both sides and state your own view.
structure
You use some linking words to show flow.
examples
You give examples such as travel and phones.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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