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The Maps illustrate layout New York in different periods like in 1950 and now (2026)

The Maps illustrate
layout
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the layout
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New
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of New
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 York in different periods
like
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, like
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 in 1950 and now (2026).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a few (20000
)
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apply
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population
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 in 1950
but
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, but
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 over the period these numbers changed sharply
like
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apply
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it
reached
Wrong verb form
reaching
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200 000
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200000
population
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,
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. Also
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also
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, there
is
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are
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 extra things added to
current
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the current
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 city
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such
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, such
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 as
bridge
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a bridge
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 and
dam
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a dam
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. In 1950, there were a few things in the city
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such
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, such
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 as one big river,
bridge
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a bridge
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 and
government
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a government
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 building in the middle of the city,
small
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a small
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 airport
in
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on
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 the east
side
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 of the map,
business
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a business
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 district and
residential
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a residential
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 area
in
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on
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 the north
side
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 of the layout.
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Also
Add a comma
Also,
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 the
population
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 was
20 000
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20,000
and
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, and
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 there was a major road for inhabitants
in
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on
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 all
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side
Fix the agreement mistake
sides
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 of the layout. When it comes to now, many things were added
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such
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, such
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 as
in
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on
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 the east
side
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 of the map,
airport
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the airport
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 was extended and
added
Wrong verb form
an additional
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 dam
to
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was added to
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 keep water inside because in the middle of the map was added big lake and
also
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, extra bridge.
Moreover
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, there are two big residential areas with government
building
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buildings
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in
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on
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 both sides (North and South).
Also
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, the
population
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 was increased to
200 000
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200,000
 and added extra major road
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due
Verb problem
was added due
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 to
high
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the high
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population
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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