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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Every year large numbers of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons.

In recent
years
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years,
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 a great number of people
move
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have moved
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 abroad for particular purposes. In
this
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 essay, I will touch on both
benefits
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the benefits
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 and drawbacks of
this
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 situation. Moving abroad
,
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apply
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it
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apply
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means you have various chances to get new
job
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 opportunities, expand
their
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your
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 social circle, friends and enhance your outlook. One of the main benefits
,
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apply
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 is jumping into new
job
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 opportunities,
boost
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boosting
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 your skills in your profession and
promote
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being promoted
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 to
new
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a new
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 position.
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, in
IT
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the IT
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 sector, you can deep dive and increase your technical and soft skills in
foreign
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a foreign
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 company,
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 you
endeavor
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endeavour
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 to learn different tools, frameworks and other applications which are relevant to your field.
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, you meet new people and expand your social life circle;
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,
get
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you get
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 the chance to discover new traditions, culture, new places and
better
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a better
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 climate.
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, in terms of there are some downsides
of
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this
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 trend. You will encounter a tough time during the adaptation period. If you are faced with any problems, you should handle them by yourself, in the other hand, you need a lot of money because, your expenses will go up and demands will reach to peak,
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, finding the place to live has to be near to your new company,
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, you need to find suitable
job
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 for yourself which provide your daily needing and expenditure. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 living in another country
,
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apply
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 gives you
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to evolve yourself in business life and to know other
pupils
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people
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 and their lifestyle;
whereas
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, you should handle your problem by yourself and find
better
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a better
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job
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 during
this
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 hard time.

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thesis/plan
Add a clear main idea in the first line and keep it to the end of the essay. A strong view helps the reader.
structure
Use two clear paragraphs for the good side and the bad side. Start each paragraph with a main point.
content
Give more detail for each point and add simple real examples.
grammar
Check grammar and fix mistakes with subject-verb and word form.
coherence
Use simple links like 'and', 'but', 'also', and 'for example' to make the flow smooth.
structure
The essay shows a plan and uses both sides.
content
There are some clear ideas and an example in IT.
analysis
The writer tries to explain steps or stages.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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