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In some countries , more and more adults are living with their parents after graduating from college, university, or even afer finding a job. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no doubt that in multiple countries there is an increasing amount of adults living with their parents after graduating from college or university
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 even after getting a job
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 the fact that most things are getting more and more expensive.
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to
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 begin with, most individuals in the present time prefer living with their parents to save money, because they won't pay rent or buy groceries
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, they will have better relations with their family
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positive
 outcome in the long run
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 is because they will spend more quality time with their loved ones. Another point to consider, adults might lack
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responsibilty
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responsibility
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indipendence
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independence
, in the future. It is
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 possible to say that they might rely on their parents for a lot of things that a basic adult should know how to do,
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 as cooking, doing
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 own laundry, and cleaning.
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Moreover
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there is
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lack
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a lack
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 of romantic privacy.
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 conclusion,
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 living with your family after graduation has its advantages, it
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 has some
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that
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 is why
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 my opinion,
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 believe that living on your own
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has advantages
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outweigh
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that outweigh
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 the disadvantages.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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