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The chart below provides information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including future prediction. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates information about
urban
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the urban
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population
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 is increasing in different parts of the world. And predictions for the next 4 years.
Overall
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, it shows
that
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apply
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the
population
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 of different continents and the whole world. And it
also
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 shows the increase
of
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in
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 the
population
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 in the 19th century. First of all, the highest
population
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 rate was in Latin America starting from
1950
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1950,
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 by about 41%
whitsh
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white
after
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. After
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 that,
had
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it had
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anter
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a sharp
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 jump to about 70% and
it
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which
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 was the highest at that time. It is predicted to be at the top in 2030.
On the other hand
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, in
asia
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Asia
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 it started in 1950
by
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at
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 12% at that time and by the
last
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 count it
reatshed
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reached
 39% in 2000, and it is predicted to
reatch
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reach
 57% in 2030
Secondly
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, in Africa it was 11% in 1950, and it continued to increase until it
reated
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reached
 39% in 2000.In the next
stage
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stage,
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 it's predicted to
reatch
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reach
 51% by 2030.
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Finally
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Finaly,
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 the growth of the whole world
it
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apply
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started by 30% in 1950,
then
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 it
start
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started
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 to grow until it
reatsh
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reached
 around 49% in 2000
and
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, and
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 in the near
futsher
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future
 it
predicted
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is predicted
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 to be 60%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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