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You had planned to visit your head office which is located in a different city but can no longer go. Write a letter to the manager of the head office. In your letter * explain why you can't go * apologise for the short notice * Suggest a new time to visit

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to
intimate
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inform
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 you regarding a recent change in my plan to visit the head office,
that
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which
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 was scheduled for 23rd May 2026. An alternative option needs to be looked
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at
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because of my parents' wedding anniversary. When I scheduled
this
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 meeting, I was unaware that the dates of
family
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the family
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 function and
visit
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the visit
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are
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were
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 overlapping. As we all were preparing for
this
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 function
from
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for
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very
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a very
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while
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 back. My parents may
got
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have been
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 disappointed if I did not attend
this
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 event, as
this
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 is their golden jubilee. I am fully aware that
this
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 is not an act of professionalism
and
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, and
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 it may disrupt the company's operations.
Therefore
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, I sincerely apologise
but
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, but
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 I can not miss the event because I
owe
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have
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 some responsibilities towards my family. I already had a word with the dispatcher of our department, she suggested
me
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apply
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some upcoming dates for an appointment.
However
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, I picked the earliest one
which
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, which
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 would be
,
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apply
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 24th
may
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May
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 2026, a day after of appointment that
has
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was
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 decided earlier.
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Hence
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Hence,
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 if there
is
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are
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 any more concerns
just
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, just
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 let me know, I would be happy to assist. That would be great if you
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could revert
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 with
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an acknowledge
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acknowledge
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acknowledgement
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 mail regarding the change in plan. Yours
Sincerely
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sincerely
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, Adam Smith.

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Task Response
Make the reason for not going clear and tie it to one main idea in the first paragraph.
Task Response
State the new date clearly and add a second option in case the first is not OK.
Coherence
Break into three short paragraphs: 1) reason, 2) apology for short notice, 3) new date and request for confirmation.
Coherence
Use simple linking words to move from one idea to the next.
Task Response
The tone is polite and respectful.
Coherence
Opening and closing are proper for a business letter.
Task Response
The letter gives a date for reschedule and shows you want to fix the plan.
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