Whoever controls the media controls the mind. Discuss this statement and give your own opinion. agree = messages disagree = depend on activities

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technologies
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decades
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given
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acces
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access
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mass
media
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to reach every household in developed
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countries
.
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this
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opinion "that whoever controls the
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controls the mind"
have
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widespead
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spread
among people.Personally,
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firmly agree with
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statement because
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media
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the media
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really
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sufficient
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influence on
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citizens
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minds. A perspective really
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.You can represent one event from
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totally controversial
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why
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pessimistic
and optimistic humans exist.
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the
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article
about decreasing
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expenditure
on social help policy may be
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interpreted
as good or bad
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innovation
simultaneously.For individuals with left-wing political
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it is a
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useful
decision.Because it will increase
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benifits
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benefits
and a pension.
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right winged
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persons
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convinced
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this
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funds should be
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help to
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small and medium
business
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businesses
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,so
decision
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is
an
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anpopriate
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appropriate
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point of view plays a crucial role in
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the analysis
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of
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the obtained
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information
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, the one who owns the source of
information
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,
for example
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, a television channel or a news
publication
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publication,
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can influence how
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is presented.
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,
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the positive aspects and hide the negative ones. On
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hand,modern people are living in
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a world
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with
constant
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a constant
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flow of
information
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.Reading
a
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the
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news on a
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break
,
listenign
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listening
radion
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radio
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on the way to work,
compiting
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completing
working tasks and
a
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watching a
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movie before
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sleep
.
A
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brain is receiving
information
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constantly.And modern people have
taught
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how to efficiently filter pieces of
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.
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Furthermore
,the average level of education among humans is the highest
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over entire
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history.
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this
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these
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two factors affecting on minds becoming harder with every year
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it
still
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posible
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possible
. In
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conclusion
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the fact of education and the habit
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of sorting
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incoming
information
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flow.
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media
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can manipulate the minds and positions of
audience
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the audience
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.

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Task Response
Make your view clear at the start and keep it in mind as you write.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use one idea per paragraph and start each with a simple topic sentence.
Grammar
Fix small errors in spelling and form to help the reader.
strength
You show a strong view that media can sway minds.
development
You give some reasons to back your view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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