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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recent advances in information technology have enabled
students
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 to study from the comfort of their
home
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, as opposed to studying with their
peers
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 in a
classroom
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. Both methods have their benefits and drawbacks,
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 prefer studying in a
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. In
this
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 essay, we will examine the benefits of each approach compared to the other. On the one hand, online learning offers various advantages. For one,
students
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 no longer need to commute to school, giving
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 greater free time.
Students
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 have more freedom in scheduling their lessons, as many online learning portals allow
students
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 to access learning resources at the time of their
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. Meanwhile, not being physically in the same room with their
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 may appeal to
students
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 who fear bullying from their fellow
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,
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 it may hinder their ability to resolve conflicts later in life.
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, studying in a
classroom
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 offers greater support for struggling
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, as teachers can more readily identify and help those who are behind in their studies, or offer more challenges to those who are ahead of their
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. Studies have shown that
students
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 who learn exclusively online tend to fall behind their
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. Learning alongside fellow
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 of roughly the same age and developmental stage
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 teaches
students
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 valuable lessons in friendships and hones their social skills, which are increasingly important in ensuring their future success.
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, online learning has the advantage of giving
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 more freedom,
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in-
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classroom
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 learning gives more support for
students
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, both in their studies and in their
socialization
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.
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benefits
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benefit
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 from greater freedom and less
socialization
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socialisation
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, I think most
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 are better off learning with their fellow
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 in a
classroom
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Task Response
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and stay with it in the end.
Examples
Add more precise examples from life or study to back your points.
Coherence
Link ideas in each paragraph with simple words like also, but, and however to make flow smooth.
Grammar
Check small grammar slips, like the plural or verb form after words like benefit.
Ideas
Clear choice on the side you take.
Organization
Good layout with intro, body, and conclusion.
Content
Balanced view of both sides.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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