Some people believe that clothes influence the way people are judged in society, while others think that a person’s character is more important than their appearance. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some individual thinks that the
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you look
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affects
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on
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other people's assessment of you,
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other
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others
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have
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are
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convinced that personal qualities are more important.
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essay will discuss both views before presenting my own opinion. On the
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other
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hand,
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Appearance
really
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.The
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a human
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looks
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displays an
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attitude
towards himself.If
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a person
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wears dirty clothing,stinks
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, and
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overall
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seems untidy and clumsy
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this
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means that the person does not respect
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themselves
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.
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Consequently
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why
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do others
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have to respect
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an
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individual
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in
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other
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another
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.
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It
doesnt
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doesn't
mean a cheap dress or a lack of accessories should be suggested as disrespect.Everybody just
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needs
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to maintain basic
hygien
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hygiene
and
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a neat
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appereance
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appearance
that is
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completely enough.
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Furthermore
,
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impresion
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impressions
are always
rely
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based
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on appearance.
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is
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human nature.Because it is
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way
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to estimate and create an opinion about other
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humans
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for
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first
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time.You
cant
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can't
see a temper or erudition just with your eyes.
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Instead
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you can see the style or a behaviour.
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,
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a person’s
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character
individuals are
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is
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judged in the long term.During prolonged
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interaction,
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other qualities
expose
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are exposed
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to review.
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,opinion can be formed on
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the
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base
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basis
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of inner traits.
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as courage, sensitivity, insight and etc.
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, employers usually value reliability and professionalism more than the
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a person dresses.
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, character plays a much more significant role in shaping people's opinions about others. The clothes influence the
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people are judged for
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first
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the first
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time.It can create
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spark for future
realtionship
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relationships
but
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, but
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will
this
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relationship
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will
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be established depends on character. In conclusion,
although
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appearance may be a big help at
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first
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, internal qualities decide the outcome.

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language
Fix the basics: correct spelling, grammar, and punctuation so the message is clear.
structure
Plan your text: start with a short intro, then one paragraph for appearance, one for character, then your view.
coherence
Use linking words to show contrast and link ideas (for example, 'however', 'also', 'in addition', 'therefore').
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
organization
There is a clear end that gives your own view.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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