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Band 3.5

Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems.

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Environment
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Environmental
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pollution
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 has become a serious problem in many
countires
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countries
. Air, water, and land
pollution
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 are affecting people's health and the natural
environment
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. Because of those dangers, many governments are trying to find solutions to reduce
pollution
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 and protect the planet. One major cause of environmental
pollution
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 is industrial activity. Factories often release harmful gases and
chemical
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chemicals
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 into the air and water. These pollutions can cause serious health problems
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 as breathing difficulties and diseases. Another important cause is the large number of
vehicals
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vehicles
 on the roads. Cars and
motocycles
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motorcycles
 produce exhaust fumes that pollute the air and contribute to climate change. To solve these problems, many countries are introducing new policies and laws.
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, governments are setting limits on factory emissions and encouraging industries to use cleaner technology. Some countries are
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 promoting renewable energy sources
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 as solar and wind power
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 of fossil
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and
 fuels.
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, public transportation systems are being improved to reduce the number of private vehicles on the road. In my opinion,
pollution
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have
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 an important role in
protecitng
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protecting
 the
environment
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. Individuals can reduce
pollution
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 by recycling, saving energy, and using public transportation or bicycles
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 of driving
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 car. In
conclution
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conclusion
, environmental
pollution
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 is a serious global issue that requires action from both governments and individuals. By working together and using sustainable
solution
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solutions
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, countries can reduce
pollution
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and
 create a
healtheir
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healthier
environment
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 for future generations.

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task response
To improve task response, stay on topic. State a clear view that pollution is bad and needs to be cut. Add one or two strong, simple ideas with clear examples.
coherence
To help coherence, group ideas in this order: cause, effect, solution. Use linking words like first, next, also, but, so.
language
Fix language: use correct form and small words. Use 'pollution' as a mass noun. Correct spellings like 'factories', 'vehicles', 'fossil fuels'.
structure
Give a clean intro and a closing line. The end should restate the view and say what can fix it.
content
The writer does give main ideas on cause and fix.
content
Plan to use government rules and clean energy is shown.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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