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Band 3

some people belive that professionals such as doctors and engineers , should be required to work in the country where they did their training . others belive they should be free to work in another country if they wish. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 some people argue that professionals
such
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 as doctors and engineers
,
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 should be required to work in the
country
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 where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in any other
country
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 if they wish to.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own personal view, which supports a balanced approach. On one hand, critics argue that professionals
such
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 as engineers and doctors should be required to work
to
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 their
country
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 because of how vital they are to their society.
For instance
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, doctors may
operate
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perform
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 intense medical surgeries
to
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 some injured individuals, or even invent new medical tools that are useful and helpful
to
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 some extreme medical procedures.
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, professionals
such
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 as engineers are considered one of the most essential jobs in a society, leading the majority of the citizens towards a better and
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 future by
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inventions
 and hidden mathematical solutions.
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, working for another
country
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 may lead to useful experiences and discovering new ways to help others.
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, translating medical books is a
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 subject leading to major new discoveries in medical history.
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, discovering new solutions to some mathematical problems in engineering is a vital subject leading the world
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towards the better by uniting.
To conclude
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,
although
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 working for
the
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one society may lead to a slight growth and
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improvement
. In my personal view,working for other societies is the best solution
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where
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it
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will lead
major
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to major
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 improvements and new discoveries.

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task response
Make your view clear in the intro. Then have 3 body parts: one on staying, one on going, and one on your own view. Use one strong real example for each side. End with a short conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence cohesion
Make the links in the text. Use small words to connect ideas like and, but, also, so, for example. Each paragraph should have one main point. Check your grammar so the idea is easy to follow.
task response
The essay shows both sides and has a final opinion.
coherence cohesion
It has an intro and a closing part.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • country
  • maintain
  • high standard
  • quality
  • professional services
  • local population
  • access
  • well-trained
  • contribute
  • development
  • progress
  • obligation
  • give back
  • society
  • invested
  • education
  • promote
  • national identity
  • pride
  • free
  • another country
  • wish
  • global exchange
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • facilitate
  • collaboration
  • innovation
  • opportunities
  • experiences
  • international mobility
  • enhances
  • growth
  • host country
  • choice
  • encourage
  • return
  • period of time
  • balance
  • individual freedom
  • needs
  • home country
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