The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling differents types of vehicles such as cars, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.

The given line graph shows the number of three different vehicles that
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were used
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by the passengers for over half
century
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a century
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, and is measured in millions.
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,
car
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the car
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is the highly requested vehicle, followed by
train
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the train
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in 2030. Meanwhile,
due to
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a steady decline,
bus
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buses
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becomes
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become
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the
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apply
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less popular
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of the period. In 1970,
car
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cars
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stood at 5, and
become
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became
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the highest trend among others.
Then
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, from 1980 to 2000, it had a slight increase
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over 6.
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, it peaked
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9 in 2030. Compared to the remaining transportation, by 1970,
Bus's
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the bus
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trend was higher than
Car
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the Car
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, with over 3
rate
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apply
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.
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, throughout the period, it fell to below 3, and became the lowest figure for over
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a decades
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decades
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decade
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. Despite being the unpopular vehicle in 1970,
train
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the train
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had a slight rise until 2010.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, it rose considerably at 4, making it the second most
choosen
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chosen
vehicle by the public.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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