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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think that it is fine for professional sportmen and sportwomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Do you agree or disagree this statement?

Sports play a major role in developing a person from
his
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childhood in various aspects.
According to
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 how important it is, some individuals think it is okay to misbehave as long as
you
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they
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 are good at what
you
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they
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 are doing. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 we will discuss each
persepactive
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perspective
. To commence with, a huge number of supportive society members will overlook their best
player
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's mistakes just because he's good at his match, thinking that pointing out his wrongs will alter his performance or make people doubt his ability to play
, it
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. It
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 is a matter of multiple imaginary
consepts reborns
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concepts reborn
 from the fear of their
player
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 losing.
On the other hand
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, a large number of individuals who follow the rules won't accept others disrespecting anyone, or troublemaking, even if it is coming from their favourite
player
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, more
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. More
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 important than
player
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 performance is his attitude, and being respectful.
To sum up
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, I hugely agree with any statement provided and encourage people to take
actions
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 against anyone
who's
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who
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misbehaving
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misbehaves
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 and
violating
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violates
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 the rules.

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task response
Be clear on your view at the start. Say if you agree or not, and what you will talk about in body paragraphs.
coherence
Plan your essay. In the first part say your main idea, in the next one say why, and in the last part give a short end.
coherence
Use only one idea in each paragraph and link your ideas with easy words like 'also' or 'but'.
examples
Add at least one real or clear example to back up your point.
language
Check spell and grammar. Fix common errors and keep the lines short.
structure
There is a start and a end to the essay.
content
The writer shows both sides of the view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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