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ome people think that it is fine for professional sportmen and sportwomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Do you agree or disagree this statement?

Sports play a major role in developing a person from  childhood in various aspects.
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 how important it is, some individuals think it is okay to misbehave as long as they are good at what they are doing. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss each perspective.  To commence with, a huge number of supportive society members will overlook their best player's mistakes just because he's good at his match, thinking that pointing out his wrongs will alter his performance or make people doubt his ability to play. It is a matter of multiple imaginary concepts reborn from the fear of their player losing. 
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, a large number of individuals who follow the rules won't accept others disrespecting anyone, or troublemaking, even if it is coming from their favourite player. More important than athlete performance is his attitude
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 and being respectful.
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, I hugely agree with any statement provided and encourage people to take action against anyone who misbehaves and violates the rules

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task response
Be clear about your main view in the first paragraph and keep it in the last paragraph.
coherence
Start each paragraph with a clear main idea and add details that stay on that idea.
coherence
Use simple reasons and simple examples to explain why misbehave is not okay, and avoid big phrases.
grammar
Fix awkward or wrong word choices and use correct grammar.
structure
The essay has both sides and a final idea to be read.
cohesion
There are some linking words like 'On the other hand' and 'To sum up'.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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