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Some people believe that scientific subjects such as mathematics and philosophy are difficult and should therefore be optional for students rather than compulsory. show if you are agree or disagree

Some young people think that scientific
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 are hard to follow
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for
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this
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 reason should be optional for
students
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 rather than mandatory.
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, from my
prospetive
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perspective
,
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subject
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subjects
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 like mathematics and philosophy are very important for
students
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 because
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halp
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help
 them to develop critical thinking.
Certainlly
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, it is not
easiest
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the easiest
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subject
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,
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however
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,
it is clear that
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this
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 kind of challenge sometimes
are
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 important for
theaching
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teaching
 how
pass
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 through difficulties.
According to
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 some
students
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, certain fundamental
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subject
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,
such
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 as mathematics,
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should
 be optional in a school.
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,
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subject
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subjects
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 like
mathematic
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 optional would be a bad idea
becouse
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because
 it is important to have
basical
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basic
 knowledge in order to live and function in modern society. For
istance
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instance
, it is impossible to have a good
carrer whitout
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career without
be
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being
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 able to make
calculation
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calculations
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 or having critical thinking.
On the other hand
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, giving
students
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 the possibility to choose the subjects they prefer could be an opportunity to
foucus
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focus
 on topics that are more interesting
them
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.
This
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approch
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approach
 may
can
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halp
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help
 to increase
students
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'
performaces
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performances
 because they are more motivated to study
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subject
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subjects
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 that
enjoy
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they enjoy
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reather
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rather
those
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than those
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 they dislike. When
students
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 study subjects that interest them, they are usually more motivated and engaged in the learning process.
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, they may achieve better academic results and develop a deeper understanding of the topic.
In addition
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, every student has different talents and abilities. Allowing
students
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 to choose some subjects may help them focus on areas where they can perform better and develop their potential. In conclusion,
for
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 my point of
view
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view,
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 it is very important for young people
learn
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to learn
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 to do
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also
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apply
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thing
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things
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 that
do
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they do
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 not like
them
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apply
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. First of all,
are
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they are
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 essential for their development and
personallity
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personality
grow
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growth
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.

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Task Response
Say clearly what side you take and keep it in the essay.
Coherence
Link ideas with clear and easy transitions.
Content
Give clear reasons or small facts for each point.
Language
Fix grammar and spell wrong words and match verb to subject.
Structure
Plan the essay: intro, 2 body parts, and a short ending.
Content
The idea that the topic is important is shown.
Structure
There is a plan with start, middle, and end.
Content
The essay tries to talk about both sides of the issue.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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