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Band 5.5

The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in the industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the number of
hours
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 worked per week by industrial
workers
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 in four European countries (France, Sweden, Denmark, and Finland) in 2010.
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,
workers
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 in France and
The
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the
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 UK worked significantly more
hours
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,
while
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other
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the other
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 two
counties
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countries
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. In 2010, about 50 % industrial
workers
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 in France worked 31- 35
hours
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 and
at
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apply
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approximately 40% worked 36 -40
hour
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hours
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. by
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by
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 contrast Denmark there 75 % worked under 41
hours
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. The majority part British
workers
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 worked 36-40
reached at
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hours, reaching
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 approximately 50%
,
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. Moreover
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moreover
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moreover,
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 around 40%
workers
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 worked over 41
hours
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in
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; in
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 contrast Sweden there
just
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only
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 20% worked more
40
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than 40
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hours
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. In conclusion, across three
countries
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countries,
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 the standard working time tends to
around
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be around
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 36–40
hours
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,
while
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 in the
UK
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UK,
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 a higher proportion of
workers
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worked
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work
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 extra
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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