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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the
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 bar chart illustrates changes in the
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 structure of Iceland's population from 1990 to 2020.
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, the 25-54
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 group accounted for the largest
proportion
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 during the period.
In contrast
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, the percentages of younger
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 groups declined,
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 the
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 of
elderly
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 increased slightly. In 1990, people aged 25–54 represented about 30% of the population.
This
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 figure rose gradually to around 42% in 2020, making it the dominant
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 group. Meanwhile, the
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 of children aged 0–14 decreased from approximately 24% to about 11%. Regarding the remaining groups, the percentage of people aged 65 and over increased slightly from around 12% to about 10–11%.
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, the 55–64
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 group fell from about 13% to roughly 5%.
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, the
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 of those aged 15–24 dropped significantly from around 20% in 1990 to about 5% in 2020.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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