The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the method to process bamboo into fabric.
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, the whole picture indicates how bamboo undergoes certain steps and eventually becomes real fabric products. Start from dealing with original plants, and using their protocols to turn them into actual material and our daily utilities,
such
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as socks and clothes. For the first four steps, they plant bamboo plants
at
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in
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the season of spring, whilst
harvest
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them in
autumn
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the autumn
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. After getting the raw materials, they will cut
it
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them
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into smaller strips in order to pass to the next step, crushing them.
Wtihin
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Within
these
process
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processes
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, they have made the pre-products for the following tasks. As for the remaining ones, filter, soften fibres, spin, and weave, they all lead to the final products. Liquid pulp from the previous steps will be filtered by liquid to separate long fibres.
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water and amine oxide will be added to
make
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soften
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fibres
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the fibres
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soften
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apply
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. Eventually, they become yarn by
spining
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spinning
and
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weave
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weaving
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them to turn them into the actual fabric.
By
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all the effort, they are
finally
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usable in our daily life.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bamboo
  • fabric
  • cloth
  • fiber
  • yarn
  • thread
  • weave
  • knit
  • stages
  • steps
  • process
  • harvest
  • cut
  • crush
  • break
  • fiber
  • spin
  • weave
  • finish
  • wash
  • dye
  • color
  • soft
  • strong
  • material
  • final
  • make
  • from
  • to
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