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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.

The bar chart compares how families in a particular country allocated their weekly income across various expenditure categories in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, there was a marked decline in the proportion of income spent on
food
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 over the 50-year period, accompanied by substantial increases in spending on housing and
leisure
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.
Leisure
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 emerged as the dominant category in 2018,
while
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 personal
goods
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 represented the smallest share. In 1968,
food
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 consumption accounted for the largest expenditure at 30%,
whereas
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 housing, transport, and
leisure
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 each accounted for roughly 7-10% of the budget. Clothing and footwear
and
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 personal
goods
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 were relatively modest expenses, each constituting less than 10%. By 2018, the spending pattern had shifted considerably. Expenditure on
food
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 dropped dramatically to 18%, reflecting changes in lifestyle or affordability.
Conversely
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, housing costs doubled to 14%, indicative of increased living expenses or improved housing standards.
Leisure
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 saw the most significant increase, soaring from 9% to 22%, overtaking all other categories. Transport expenses
also
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 rose to 14%,
while
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 spending on fuel, personal
goods
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, and clothing diminished. Meanwhile, household
goods
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 remained relatively stable, indicating consistent spending in
this
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 area. These shifts highlight evolving priorities and lifestyle changes over the half-century, with families allocating more of their budget towards comfort and
leisure
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 and less towards basic necessities
such
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 as
food
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, leisure, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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