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Band 2.5

The plans below show the layout of a university's sporst centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
two
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 layout diagrams illustrate the comparison between
current
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the current
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 university
sports
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 centre and its future reconstruction planning. In general,
it is clear that
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 a major modernisation
take
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has taken
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 place in the
sports
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 centre, with
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the introducing
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introducing
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introduction
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new
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of new
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 facilities and
enlargement
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the enlargement
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 of its physical building
are
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being
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 the most noticeable features. At present, the
sports
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 arena has one building with four major facilities and
two
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 outdoor courts on the west and east
side
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sides
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. In the future,
main
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the main
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 building will be expanded,
hence
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, those outdoor courts
are
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will be
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 completely
diminished
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removed
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 to install seven new rooms.
Otherwise
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, the deep pool, gym, seating, prior changing room, and receptionist desk are maintained
their
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in their
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 positions. Concerning the western part, a leisure pool is planned to be installed,
whereas
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 the eastern
will
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part will
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be added
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have
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 a
sports
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 hall and
two
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 dance studios
.
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added.
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Consequently
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, the changing room is
inteded
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intended
 to set three units,
two
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 new rooms are positioned both on the left and right corners after the entrance, adjacent to a
sports
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 shop and a cafe.

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task response
For task response, cover all main changes in a clear way. You noted many new parts, but some points are not fully clear or exact.
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Use more exact detail from the maps. For example, say where new areas go and what old areas are removed.
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Write ideas in a simpler way. Some lines are hard to understand, so your main meaning is not always clear.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, group the west side and east side changes in a more even way.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, such as now, in the future, on the left, on the right, while, and also.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar, because weak grammar makes the flow hard to follow.
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You gave a clear overall view that the centre will be bigger and more modern.
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You mentioned key changes such as new rooms, a sports hall, a cafe, and a shop.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has basic paragraphing and a clear time comparison: now and in the future.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like in general, at present, in the future, and concerning.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • redevelopment
  • currently
  • after the plan
  • sports centre
  • swimming pool
  • gym
  • outdoor courts
  • indoor facilities
  • sports hall
  • dance studio
  • seating area
  • changing room
  • expanded
  • removed
  • added
  • located in the east
  • in the west
  • in the south
  • in the centre
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