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the graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European nation from 2004 to 2018

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The chart below illustrates how the number of
inhabitants
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turtle inhabitants
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 of turtles had changed
for
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over
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 a period of 32 years.
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, all species experienced a decrease over the entire period
with
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, with
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 the exception of
Olive
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the Olive
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 Ridley Turtle.In the ultimate

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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