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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think increasing the cost of fuel is the best way to solve global environmental problems .To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

In many parts of the
world
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It
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it
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 is increasingly common for people to
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cost
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pay
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of
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for
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 the
fuel
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.
Personally
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 I agree with
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this
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the
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 increasing
cost
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 of
the
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apply
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fuel
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. There are
number
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 of potential benefits to
this
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 development .
most
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 notably,
It
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 can lead to
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significantly
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 improvement in
fuel
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 . One of
main
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 reasons for
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 is that it creates opportunities for increasing
cost
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.which can have
positive
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a positive
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 effect in the long term . Despite these benefits , there are some potential drawbacks to
this
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 development.
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.
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 it may have
negative
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a negative
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 impact on
cost
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 . because poor people can’t buy
fuel
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 for cars or other things.One of
main
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the main
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 reasons for
this
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 problem is that
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, For
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For
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for
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sceints
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scientists
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reasearcher ssay
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researchers say
 that the
fuel
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don’t
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will not
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 be enough in
2030
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the 2030
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 strategy .
so
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 many people think
if
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that if
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cost
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the cost
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fuel
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of fuel
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increase
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increases
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,
It
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it
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 will be enough
Other
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for Other
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 years. Which can lead to
further
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diffucelties
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difficulties
 in the long term. In summary ,
while
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 there may be
Increase
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increased
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 costs of the
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fuel
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fuel,
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 I strongly
arguet
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argue
 that.

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
task response
Give clearer main ideas. Each body paragraph should have one main point, then explain it with simple reasons.
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Use a real and clear example. Your example about fuel in 2030 is hard to understand, so it does not help your answer well.
coherence and cohesion
Write a clearer structure: introduction, 2 body paragraphs, and conclusion. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Connect ideas with simple linking words like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence links to the next one. Some parts stop suddenly or repeat words, so the essay feels broken.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a short ending.
task response
You try to discuss both good and bad sides of higher fuel cost.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like despite these benefits, in particular, and in summary.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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