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Global warming is one of the various climate issues. Discuss the possible causes ad offer measures to control the damage caused.

Nowadeys
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Nowadays
global
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, global
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 warming is only one
from
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of
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varius
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various
 climate
problem
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problems
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.
Overall
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, from my point of view
global
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, global
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 warming is a big issue caused by
carbone dioxine
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carbon dioxide
 with consequent greenhouse effect
:
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.
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,
is
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it is
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 not easy to manage
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this kind
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these kinds
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 of problems
becouse
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because
are
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they have
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global
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a global
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 impact
but
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, but
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 it is not impossible using
conscesness
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consciousness
. One
for
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of
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 the major worries
from
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for
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today
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today's
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 scientists is global warming. Every year the temperature
increase
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increases
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up
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by up
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 to two
degree
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degrees
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,
this
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 is
a
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an
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 enormous problem
whit
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with
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 high
envirmental impat
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environmental impact
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for
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, for
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 example
melting
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, melting
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glacer
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glaciers
 or
estiction
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extinction
from
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of
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 species like polar
bear
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bears
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. The causes
about
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of
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eart
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global
 warming
is
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are
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expecially
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especially
carbon
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dioxine
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dioxide
 production over the
amissible
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allowable
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 quantity,
this
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 is called
greehouse
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greenhouse
 gas.
This
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 gas
create
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creates
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 a layer around the
athmosphere
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atmosphere
 that
not
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does not
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consent to
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allow
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 UV
ray
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rays
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 to
go out
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escape
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, so
this
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remain
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remains
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 inside and
caused
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causes
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 warming.
In addition
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, the human
activitys
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activities
increase
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have increased
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drammatically
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dramatically
 in
the
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apply
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recent years, especially
reguarding
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regarding
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the insudtrial
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insudtrial
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industrial
 sector.
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This
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These
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 activities
has
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have
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as
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a
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apply
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result
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resulted
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of
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in
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manufacturial
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manufacturing
 production pollution
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carbon
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, carbon
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 dioxide
and
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, and
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 heat that go
in
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into
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the almosphere
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almosphere
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atmosphere
.
According to
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 many
reseacher
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researchers
the
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, the
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 important mitigative
plane
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plan
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concerned
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is concerned
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about reduce
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with reducing
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the
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apply
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carbon
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 dioxide
emission
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emissions
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.
On the other hand
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,
this
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 is not
a
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an
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 easy process because our production
sistem
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system
 is
fuel based
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fuel-based
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,
insted
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instead
 university professors
has
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have
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 studied alternative
way
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ways
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 to capture
carbon
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dioxine
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dioxide
. The
princial
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principal
 method that
are
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is
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 in
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the esperimental
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esperimental
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experimental
 phase
concerned
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is concerned
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to capture
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with capturing
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carbondioxine end
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carbon dioxide and
fill
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filling
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on
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apply
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the dismiss fuel
weel
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wheel
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. Another way
shoud
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should
 be
use
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to use
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an electrial
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electrial
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electric
 car, in many
cities
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cities,
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 the public transportation is
also
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electic
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electric
, in
this
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case
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case,
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it is clear that
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 the
emission
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emissions
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was
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were
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 really low. In conclusion, the solution for
this
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 kind of problem
it
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apply
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is not so easy,
becouse
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because
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it required
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required
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requires
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 a
drastically
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drastic
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 change in the
sistem
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system
that is
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 now
using
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used
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 to produce energy.
However
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,
from
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in
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it is not impossible if people start to consider that
like
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as
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 an issue and think
responsibily
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responsibly

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task response
Answer all parts of the task more clearly. You talk about causes and ways to control damage, but some parts are not fully developed.
task response
Use clearer main ideas in each paragraph. Start each body paragraph with one clear point, then add simple support.
task response
Give more specific examples. For example, name one clean energy source or one city plan to cut car use.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end, which is good. But some ideas do not link smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words more carefully, like first, also, because, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easier to follow. Some sentences are too long or mixed, so the reader may get lost.
task response
You answer the main topic and stay on the subject of global warming.
task response
You include both causes and solutions, so your essay covers the full question.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion, which helps the reader follow your essay.
coherence and cohesion
You group ideas into paragraphs, and this gives your essay a basic shape.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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