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Band 4

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps
illustrait
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illustrate
 decorations,sections, rooms, and a variety of changes that
occured
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occurred
 in a bookstore, between
year
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the year
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 2000 and now
which
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, which
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 is basically 2025.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the service desk has not changed over the years
and
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, and
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 it has been stable.
As well as
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 travel and the new
books
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 section.
However
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, in general, it looks quite
, the
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nice, the
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 entrance is
at
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on
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 the west side
which
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, which
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 gives it a more natural look. Observing the features which are mainly in 2000, walking through the entrance in the west direction, you will notice the fiction section on
you'r
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your
 left arm, it is a huge
shelve
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shelf
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 which includes fictional
books
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 for teenagers and adults. In the middle, you will
nitice
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notice
 three
book shelves
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bookshelves
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, which
has
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have
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 art, hobby, and some cookery
books
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.
Moreover
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, from the same spot you will face the non-fiction
books
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, not just that,
however
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, non-fiction contains
sientific
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scientific
,
mathmatic
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mathematical
,
magazienz
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magazines
 and many other stuff which people would enjoy. Nowadays, many changes
has
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have
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 happened
and
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, and
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 people seem to enjoy it. The huge section that includes fictional
books
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 has been replaced by five
bookselves
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bookshelves
, at
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. At
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 the corner of the
wall
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wall,
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 you will notice some art
book
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books
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,
then
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 next to
it
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it,
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 there are hobbies. After that
the
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, the
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 cookery.
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Lastly
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 fiction, which is a very small part. At the other corner, which is on
tou
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your
 right hand, non-fictional
books
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 are
replaces
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replaced
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 right there.
In addition
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, a little
smal
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small
 cafe has been added
instead
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if
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of
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 non-fiction.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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