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Some parents think that helpline their children with homework is good. Others think that children should do their homework on their own Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that there are many parents thinks assisting their
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 is a part of their duty as a parent , and others argue that
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children homeworks
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 and helping them can be harmfull ,
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 essay will discuss both views and express my opinion. On one hand, giving
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guidance
 and
advise
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advice
 on steps to the solution of problems can help kids
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achieve
 more without relying much on
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their
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in
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 other words, they would still think and try by
them self
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themselves
 to figure out a way to solve the
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 the
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theorem
 of
math
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 lesson and leaving the child
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 by himself can be quite helpful. On
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 hand, if the parents decided that their child
shoud
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should
 depend on himself only without any
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assistent
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assistance
, it can backfire as the nature of
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 to get distracted easily.
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, a child may give up on
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trying
 and abandon the
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 games. In conclusion,
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 are no easy
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answers
 to
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 question. On balance,
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,
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 tend to believe that
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helping
 the
children
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 to some point can be useful and good .

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coherence cohesion
Write your main idea in a more clear way in each body part.
coherence cohesion
Use clear link words like 'Firstly', 'However', and 'As a result' to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Add more support to each main point with one more clear reason or example.
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Answer both views more fully and make your opinion very clear from the start.
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Develop your ideas more so the reader can see why you think this.
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Use examples that are more specific and easy to understand.
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You discuss both sides of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
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You give examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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