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In some countires, owning a home rather renting one is very inportant for people. Why might this be case? do you think ths is a positive or negative situation

In certain countries owing a
property
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instead
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 of renting
one
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very
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essential for individuals. In prespective i believe owning a
property
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 is a positive advancement
over
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in
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 the world
not
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, not
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 only in specific
placecs
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places
.
One
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 major reason is that renting a house may
be
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cause a barrier between reducing expenses and flexible living
,
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.
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For instance
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, Many people rent a place that limits their urges of renovation
, Meanwhile
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 renters in most cases do not
allows
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 individuals to change anything in the building
,
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.
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, it may increase the price abruptly, whice is restrict people more.
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One
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 the other hand,
Owning
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 a
property
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 provides stability for families
,
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, owning a house can be a long-term investment
, to
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 illustrate,
families
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the value of
property
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 often increases over time
,
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, homeowners can modify their houses as they wish, and
this
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more
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free
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freedom than
then
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 renting.
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, renting a
property
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 is expensive for people who used to have
a
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normal jobs
,
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However
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 Owining
one
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is reducing
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reduces
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 high expenses over
the
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time
,
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 Personally i believe the rent is restrict individuals and
rduce
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 the ability to be comfortable in
the
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daily life.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly: why people want to own a home, and why this is good or bad.
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Give one clear main idea in each body part, then explain it more.
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Use a real and clear example to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make topic sentences simple and direct so the reader can follow your plan.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check word order and sentence connection, because some lines are hard to follow.
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You answer the question and give your opinion that owning a home is positive.
coherence and cohesion
You include an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has paragraphing, with separate main parts.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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