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The table below illustrates the production of milk annually in four different countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

The table below illustrates the
production
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 of milk annually in four different countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the most
signifcant
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significant
 rise was seen in Guatemala and Tanzania despite starting at the lowest
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number
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number,
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while
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australia
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Australia
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 faced to decrise over the
years
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 and netherlands remained stable . In
1990
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1990,
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 the milk
production
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 in Guatemala consisted
26000
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of 26000
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 and rose sharply to 55000 in 2000 and to 84000 in 2010 consisting third
as much
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of the
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production
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 from its first
number
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. Same with Tanzania
starting
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, starting
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number
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 was 87000 in 1990 and faced
to
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a
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 significant rise to 142000 in 2000
and
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, and
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 rose gradually to 155000 in
2010
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2010,
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 despite a
litlle
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little
decline
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decline,
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 it ended up twice as much from starting
number
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. Milk
production
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 in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was high from the start
11,262,000
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, 11,262,000
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 in 1990
and
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, and
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 rose steadily to 11,155,000 by 2000
and
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, and
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fall
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fell
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 slightly by 2010 .
Only
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The only
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 country
which faced for fall in numbers was Austria
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that experienced a fall in numbers was Austria, which
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 started with one of the highest numbers
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according
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, according
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 to table 11,246,000 and slightly fell over the
years
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11,105,000
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, 11,105,000
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 in 2000
and
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, and
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 9,165,000 in 2010 . The
number
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 of
production
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 in Guatemala and Tanzania rose significantly over the
years
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 ,
while
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 Netehrlands rose slightly and declined . Austria faced
to
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a
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 decline in numbers over the
years
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 despite starting with
highest
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the highest
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number
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, number, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • milk
  • year
  • country
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • climb
  • gain
  • up
  • down
  • decrease
  • fall
  • drop
  • decline
  • steady
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • significant
  • slight
  • rapid
  • dramatic
  • highest
  • lowest
  • most
  • least
  • more than
  • less than
  • as much as
  • in 1990
  • in 2000
  • in 2010
  • over the period
  • for each year
  • the table shows
  • compare
  • difference
  • gap
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • paraphrase
  • data
  • value
  • amount
  • level
  • than
  • than
  • whereas
  • while
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