IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

A friend of yours is going on holiday and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter recommend a good place that you have visited before for a holiday say where you went and where you stayed say what you can do there and what the food was like You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Chris,

Dear Chris, I just read your message that you need some recommendations for your next summer trip. I would personally suggest that you
shouild
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should
 visit Madrid
this
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 time. It was on my bucket list for
long
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a long
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 time
and
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 I had a chance to visit it
last
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 year with my wife. We stayed in
Marriot
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the Marriott
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 because it is comparatively cheaper than other hotels
and
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also
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 it is
in
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apply
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downtown
so
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, so
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 all tourist places are nearby. You should definitely visit
soccer
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the soccer
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 stadium in the city, it is quite busy on weekends, so make sure to do an advanced booking. I am pretty sure you will love it.
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,
dont
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don't
 worry about the food because Madrid is quite famous for its variety of food offerings.
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, don't forget to try local pizzas on the street. Hoping to meet you soon after your trip and discuss it in detail. Yours truly, Darshan

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Add a little more about what your friend can do there.
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Check small word errors like 'shouild', 'dont', and 'long time'.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links between ideas, like 'First', 'Also', and 'Finally'.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part of the letter.
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You answer all parts of the task.
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The tone is friendly and good for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your greeting and closing are both correct and clear.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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