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Band 4.5

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

No denying the fact
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that
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 is a highly debatable topic.
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 it is a commonly held belief that we should prevent
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 and it is a part of our duties, there is
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 other found it necessary to get used to it because it is a natural response
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 essay will discuss both points of view and express my opinion. On the one hand, preventing
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 is crucial to our today's world
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, sustainability is achieved by a stable
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, recent research showed that many
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 caused by human activity, most of that activities is a secondary level of priority for us,
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can be avoided by other alternatives. For
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, we can replace the harmful energy sources to the environment
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 clean energy, like wind, sea, solar
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, some people think that we are not responsible for saving the environment as humans, so nature will heal itself by default.
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, any action taken towards preventing
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 will be counted as unnatural to the environment.
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, if we take an action as humans, and because we are an external factor in the
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 process, that will be
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climate
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 response, and that might make it worse. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
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 question. On balance,
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 tend to believe that the
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 is a
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 creation, and we are taking
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full responsibility to prevent it from any action.

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Give a clear answer to the question in the introduction and keep the same view to the end.
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Explain your main ideas more. Some points are too general and need one more sentence.
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Use examples that are clear and real. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make topic sentences more direct, so each paragraph has one clear main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Some sentences are hard to follow because the meaning is not clear.
coherence and cohesion
Check how one sentence leads to the next. A few parts feel broken or repeated.
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You answered the topic and talked about both sides.
coherence and cohesion
You used an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You gave at least one example about clean energy.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph structure.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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