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Band 3

"In recent years, more people are choosing to eat at restaurants rather than cooking at home. Discuss the reasons for this trend and give your opinion."

In contemporary society, it is contended that
people
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consume out
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spend
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 most of
the
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their
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time
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.
While
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 it is true in some regards, I am of the opinion that individuals need to spend
time
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 preparing
food
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 with their family
instead
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 of eating out. On the one hand, nowadays, a lot of
people
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 waste their
time
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 out, and they are eating
food
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 in the street market, simply because they are always busy and in a hurry.
Therefore
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,
people
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 eat out.
Furthermore
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, available numerous fast
food
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 options like sandwiches, hamburgers, pizza and so on.
As a result
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,
extremely
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an extreme
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 increase in interest in fast
food
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also
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this
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 cause out eating , and
this
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 create healthy problems. Despite these factors, I firmly assert that
,
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apply
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 individuals need to spend their
time
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 at home with their children or parents
instead
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 of
consuming
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going
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 out , not only wasting
time
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 with their family , but
also
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 they can prepare healthy
food
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 for themselves.
Secondly
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, they should cook their
food
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by
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apply
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using fresh ingredients
such
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 as vegetables and fruits. These ingredients can enrich dishes with vitamins. In conclusion,
people
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 are busy with their work , so they often eat out ,
for example
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 cafe and restaurants. In my opinion, eating out is convenient , but they should consume fresh ingredients and vitamins.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly: why people eat out, and what you think about it.
task response
Give 2 or 3 clear reasons for eating at restaurants, then explain each one.
task response
Use one real and clear example to support your ideas.
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Keep your opinion the same all through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph about one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order, so each idea follows the one before it.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea and same words too much.
task response
You give your opinion in the introduction and again in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end.
task response
You mention some reasons like being busy and easy fast food.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words such as on the one hand, furthermore, and in conclusion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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