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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give tour own opinion.

In
this
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 technologically developing world, opinions differ on whether history classes are more important than other
jubjects
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subjects
 like science and technology at school. Some people believe that history is
utmost
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of utmost
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important
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importance
,
while
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other
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others
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 argue that modern subjects ought to be considered as
main
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the main
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 school subjects.
This
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 essay will
descuss
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discuss
 both perspectives before explaining why I feel that history as a subject is paramount
at
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in
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 schools.

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Write the full essay, not only the start. You need both sides and your own view.
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Answer all parts of the question in a clear way.
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Give one or two clear main ideas for each side.
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Add simple examples to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Your start is clear, but check word forms and spelling.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like first, on the other hand, and in my view.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea.
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You clearly show that there are two different views.
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You give your opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction has a clear plan for the essay.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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