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Band 4.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

Our human
right
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rights
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 should at least includes the access
of
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to
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 clean
water
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. In my opinion, governments should take the responsibility of providing good
quailty
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quality
 of
water
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 for their people in their
house
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homes
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 without charging them
by
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at
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 any
chances
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cost
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.
Water
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 is a crucial element for daily basis
,
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 it
will
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would
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 be almost unrealistic to live without it. Since one of the daily requirements for
human
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humans
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 is that we should drink more than two
liters
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litres
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 of
water
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and
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, and
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 it would be even better if we have a cup of it right after we get up from bed,it becomes a reasonable idea that we should be able to have it at our home for free. By doing so, we can make sure everyone does not have to worry
if they have to pay
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about paying
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 extra money for their rights.
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, the
water
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 supply provided free of charge helps to minimise the unequal
statements
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distribution
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 between rich
family
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families
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 and relatively poor
family
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families
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. Because people with higher income often have the
previllige
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privilege
 to get more resources as they want, whilst people who do not earn enough money can sometimes struggle with paying for clean
water
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.
Therefore
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,
by
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apply
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providing it without charging citizens could help to solve
this
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 problem. In summary, being able to access
to
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apply
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clean
water
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 has always been a human right for decades. In order to
acheive
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achieve
this
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 goal, making
water
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 a free resource for all families is an essential thing to do. If we can make it happen someday, the world will be a better place for
everyone
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everyone,
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 I believe.

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task response
For task response: your answer is clear, and you agree all the way. This is good. But your ideas need more full support. Add one more reason or explain each reason more deeply.
task response
For task response: use a more exact answer to the question. The topic says every home should get free water. You mostly talk about clean water as a right, but you should also talk more about why it should be free for all homes.
task response
For task response: add a real or clear example. For example, you can talk about poor families, sick people, or dry areas. This will make your points stronger.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your essay has a clear paragraph plan with introduction, body, and conclusion. This is a strong point. Keep this shape.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: some linking is good, like 'Moreover' and 'Therefore'. But some sentences are too long and not easy to follow. Make them shorter and more direct.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: make sure each body paragraph has one main idea, then explain it, then give an example. This will help the reader follow your thinking more easily.
task response
For task response: you clearly give your opinion in the first paragraph and keep it the same to the end.
task response
For task response: your main ideas are on topic. You talk about daily need and fairness, which both match the question.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: you use some linking words to move from one idea to the next.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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