IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Access to clean water the basic humor right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree

There is no denying the fact that
water
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 is
essintial
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essential
 to all
lifes
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life
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.
While
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 it is commonly held
belif
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belief
 that
government
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the government
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 should provide citizain a
water
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 supply for free, there
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also
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is also
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 an argument that opposes it. I
providing
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am providing
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 a
water
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 supply without cost is a wrong
descion
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decision
.
To begin
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 with, if any service or item
offered
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is offered
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 to people
with
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at
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 no cost or
even in
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at
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 a
cheap
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low
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 price, they will not see it as a valuable thing.
In other words
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, people might
missuse
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misuse
 the
water
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 by using it in unnecessary applications, which means the
overall
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consumpition
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consumption
 rate will be higher than
the
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apply
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normal.
For example
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, using
water
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 in
water
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 games like gun fighting or using it
in
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to
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 clean their
care
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car
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 twice a day
which
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, which
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far
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is far
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away
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apply
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from the
number of average
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average number of
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 car
washing
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washes
 globally. Another point to consider, offering it for free will
affects
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affect
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 the
water
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 industry, which will
limits
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limit
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 the research and development part.
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, if there was no
quality
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 check because it is a free service, the consumer will drink and use
a poor
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apply
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water
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quality
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of poor quality
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 that might cause
future's diseases for all the citizains
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future diseases for all the citizens
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.
Moreover
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, that will cause the government indirect cost for treating those patients,
therefore
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, providing
water
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 should be
a
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apply
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fully
commercialize
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commercialised
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 to make sure that
compaines
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companies
 will provide an
excelent
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excellent
quality
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 of
water
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 with
set a
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a set
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 price limit for them to keep it
afordable
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affordable
. In conclusion, despite people having different points of view, I believe that
water
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 supply should
a
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be a
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paid service to gurante having a high
quality
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 of
water
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.

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task response
Make your main idea very clear in each body paragraph.
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Add one more clear example to support your second main point.
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Explain your ideas a bit more so the reader can fully understand them.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, also, and finally to connect ideas clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order so each idea flows step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph and do not mix too many points together.
task response
You answer the question clearly and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You use examples to support your view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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